April 5: A poem in the form of a “golden shovel”

Today’s NaPoWriMo prompt suggests writing a poem in a “golden shovel” form.   It’s a little complicated:

“Today I challenge you to write a “golden shovel.” This form was invented by Terrance Hayes in his poem, The Golden Shovel. The last word of each line of Hayes’ poem is a word from Gwendolyn Brooks’ poem We Real Cool. You can read Brooks’ poem by reading the last word of each line of Hayes’ poem!”

For my “golden shovel” I selected this  short poem by Margaret Atwood:

You Fit Into Me

You fit into me

like a hook into an eye

a fish hook an open eye

And so… ta da… this is my “golden shovel” poem.  You can read Atwood’s poem by reading the last word in each line of mine:

What I know of you

seems to fit

neatly into

a thimble.  And that’s ok by me.


What you’re really like?

Well now!  That’s a

whole other tale, involving a hook

cast sideways into

the smooth lip of an

innocent swimmer, her good eye

turned to heaven before a

schnook like you decided to catch a fish.


It was a sharp and rusty hook—

as far as they go.  An

old story— the victim swam with an open

heart, forgetting to keep a watchful eye.



2 Comments Add yours

  1. Deb says:

    Lovely, true, and great use of this form.

    1. veganrose says:

      I appreciate the feedback. The NaPoWriMo prompts have been especially inspired this year! ~Rosie

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