Day 2 Rewrite: Postcard Poetry Fest 2013

Participating in the August Postcard Poetry Fest taught me this:  get the feeling or concept down first- then craft the wording.   Here is the second poem, as sent originally, followed by the edited version.

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More often

beauty lies not in blending,

but in contrast.

The point of divergence-

the point at which  

a sacred separateness

joins us in a sum of parts.

It’s the white sand beach

Stretched like a cat

against an indigo blanket of sea

The surf whispering

Here, kitty, here-

Even the dreaming cat knows,

it is both one with the world,

and a thing apart.

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